20 Jan

“So you’ve noticed some similarities between this pregnancy and your pregnancy with Liam?” Dr. Moore steepled his fingers and looked at Grace.

“No, I haven’t noticed some similarities,” she spat, mentally placing finger quotes around her words. “It’s exactly the same.”

“Grace.” Dr. Moore leaned forward in his seat. “You’ve experienced a terrible loss. You’re likely feeling like this pregnancy is a sort of redemption – a second chance, so to speak – to do it all over again. You’ve been thinking so much about Liam that it’s only natural you’re noticing some similarities between this pregnancy and Liam’s.”

“Dammnit! This isn’t something happening in my mind! I found out I was pregnant on April 20. The first time I heard his heartrate it was 163. The second time, 172. At the next appointment, it will be 170. At his first ultrasound, he was measuring 3 months, 6 days, which was three days ahead of where he should have been measuring, so they pushed my due date up from December 26 to December 23, but he is going to be born on Christmas Eve at 10:48 pm and I know this because it’s EXACTLY HOW IT HAPPENED WITH LIAM!”

Grace was shouting and she didn’t care.  She’d said the words out loud, said more than she ever had, even more than she’d admitted to Rob, who had only laughed off all of these “weird coincidences.”

Now they would probably lock her away. The tears came then, streaming down her face as she stood up. But rather than desperation, she felt – for the first time since she saw those two pink lines – strong. Laying it all out for the doctor had solidified the fact that she couldn’t possibly be fabricating all of this. She let the tears fall, knowing that they were tears of relief – relief that she could trust herself again.

“I am not crazy, Dr. Moore,” she said as she opened the office door and turned to leave. “I don’t know what any of this means, but I am not crazy.”

This post is inspired by a prompt from Write on Edge:

“The cure for anything is salt water….sweat, tears or the sea.”
~ Isak Dinesen, pseudonym of Baroness Karen von Blixen-Finecke

For your Creative Non-Fiction tell us about the last time that one of these three things “cured” you. If you are going with Fiction, have your character resolve a problem using one of the three (or all three!!!). There are so many ways you can use this prompt so be creative with it, don’t take us where we think you’ll go.

Word Limit is 300.

You can find the rest of Grace’s story here.


13 Responses to “Tears”

  1. lexy3587 January 20, 2012 at 1:29 pm #

    I want to find out more! very intriguing 🙂

  2. Barbara S. January 20, 2012 at 2:06 pm #

    I could feel her frustration, fear and anger! I sure hope she finds another doctor.

  3. le chef January 20, 2012 at 3:01 pm #

    Intriguing! Pregnancy – salt water, good take on it; I never even thought in that direction!

  4. Racing Warrior January 20, 2012 at 3:26 pm #

    Keep writing more! Loving this story.

  5. Writing Jobs January 20, 2012 at 3:38 pm #

    This was an excellent post! Thanks for sharing this today.

    Writers Wanted

  6. Venus January 20, 2012 at 4:01 pm #

    Wow, I found this very moving as a new mom. It plays into all my fears… of losing my current little bundle of joy, of having something go wrong with pregnancy number two. Well done!

  7. Angela Noelle January 20, 2012 at 4:15 pm #

    I REALLY want to read this book!!! Please write it and publish it stat 😉

    • Kristina January 20, 2012 at 7:05 pm #

      Haha! Thank you! You are too sweet! 🙂

  8. lorithatcher January 20, 2012 at 5:31 pm #

    Wow from “mentally placing finger quotes around her words.” throughout I found bits I loved. Very nice piece.

  9. RJ January 20, 2012 at 7:33 pm #

    Very nice! You did a great job with this.

  10. Cameron January 21, 2012 at 6:46 pm #

    Pregnancy is a great spin on a salt water prompt, and the mystery/sci-fi angle is very interesting.

  11. Life of a Doctor's Wife January 23, 2012 at 2:26 pm #

    Oooh! This is such an exciting twist!!!!

  12. kat9365 January 23, 2012 at 3:32 pm #

    This is a wonderful piece. Truly. I can almost feel her pain and frustration and fear.

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